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04-29-2007, 01:53 PM | #31 |
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I liked the first chapter.
The interpretation of Eduardo and Coco was nearly spot on, and Zigzag was a nice character. That said, I didn't quite like the way you portrayed Blooregard Q. Kazoo, he's not really a soft guy. More of a zany, selfish always-on-his-feet-guy. But I digress, this is about Wilt for the most part, and he was well presented throughout.
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05-09-2007, 01:08 PM | #32 |
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The first chapter was written back in August, so, not to toot my own horn or anything, but my writing has gotten a LOT better since then, mostly in writing out the character's. Bloo didn't REALLY have that mcuh of a part in the first chapter, other wise I'd have probably been able to get him alittle more in character. Sorry.
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05-13-2007, 02:24 AM | #33 |
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05-13-2007, 09:15 AM | #34 |
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Looks like Wilt has finally figured out his feelings for her. Oh no, poor Wilt!
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05-13-2007, 10:19 AM | #35 |
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Ouch...Zigzag really tore Wilt's heart apart there. I can imagine Evanescence's song "Even in Death" playing as I read that argument.
I actually had tears in my eyes from this chapter. And usually for stories, it's hard to crack me open to emotions. Well done, I say. |
05-13-2007, 10:29 AM | #36 |
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Thank you very much guys
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05-13-2007, 11:28 AM | #37 |
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Yeah, poor Wilt! I left a review over on FF.net, by the way. That scene reminded me of one in the old series, "Moonlighting", when "David"(played by Bruce Willis with HAIR) finally realized his feelings for his co-worker, "Maddie"(Cybil Shepherd), and was convinced by a bunch of old Black dudes to tell her how he felt(he'd told them of his feelings for this woman, now he's got to finally tell HER). After buying a "Flower for the Dead" from this old Latino woman who kept showing up offering them for sale, David goes running over to Maddie's appartement to tell her how he feels, only to see her going into the apartment accompanied by her old college beau, played by Mark Harmon. He just stands there in the shadows outside, as it starts to pour down rain, and he finally just turns and slams the flower into a nearby garbage can and walks off, defeated. That's exactly how it seemed for Wilt, going to bring Ziz a rose, only to have her tell him that she has accepted a date from another guy.
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06-30-2007, 06:47 PM | #38 | |
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07-01-2007, 11:06 AM | #39 |
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Poor, poor Wilt.
Yeah, that's all I can say at this point. |
09-22-2007, 07:43 AM | #40 |
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