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Originally Posted by Vampyre
Okay it's a bit late but:
*shrinks about two hundred times her size*
Oh poopie. I now feel as though I need to go shoot my own OC from my story 'Crooked Smile' (used to be Life Of a Broke Imaginary Friend but I changed the name because the original title was a bit dodgie). I have no idea whether my OC is Mary Sueish or not, but I can't help but think that she is  . |
Actually, your OC, "ZigZag", is one of the best out there. I don't know you, so I can't say if you've got this Cockney accent or act really "street tough" or not, but she reminds me of "Eliza Doolittle" in
My Fair Lady. She's almost a polar opposite of Wilt, which is why they have such good chemistry together. She's also far from "Miss Perfect"-she's got a hair-trigger temper and knows how to use it, unlike the helpless, sweetly-innocent OC "Mary Sues" in many stories. I think you're doing fine in how you are developing their relationship, too, by having them start out as friends, who don't always see eye-to-eye(no pun intended), rather than rush into the romance head-long, as most fanfic writers do. Most have Wilt and their OC fall head-over-heels for each other the first time they meet, but honestly, very few relationships start that way, and those that do, don't last very long. There's got to be something besides phyical attraction in a relationship, otherwise once that inevitably cools down, there's nothing left to hold it together.
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