I just left you a review on FF.net; you have no idea how much finding a new chapter made my day! I'm still laughing at the description of the dirty socks and other laundry in Larry's room being about to "crawl away" on their own, since that's such an accurate description of so many guys' dwelling places, and definately recalls my college days!

pitbulllady

Yay at the ending! :D

Yeah, that was one of those "IT'S ABOUT TIME" moments if ever there was!

pitbulllady

Yeah, it only took 20 chapters for them to realize that they love each other. XDD

At least THAT amount is better than a n00b story where Wilt and a Mary-Sue realize love in less than 5, and, BY chapter 5, thinking about marriage. I think most of the time in that sense, we don't know, or it's never been mentioned, that the Mary-Sue loves Wilt too, until he tells her first. Then that Mary-Sue is like "OMG i love u 2 wilt!!11!" and we're like "What?" since we didn't KNOW this. At all.

Zigzag is a fine example of a GOOD OC, she's not dense, she's not girly, she's not a moron, she doesn't care for her looks (at least, that I know of) has a bad temper, HAS A PERSONALITY, is British, (I assume that most Mary-Sues are American) and the main thing is, she looking like Wilt in almost every way was said to be coincidental; just a thing where "it just so happened to end up that way", and not a "purposeful thing" because its obvious that Sara didn't know there was Wilt around, who bears a big resemblance to Zigzag. The only thing about them that are the same in appearance, though, is their "frame", or structure. Other than that, their total opposites. But that's why they go together. :D

I've been following "Crooked Smile" since my summer vacation in Philadelphia, Pennsylvannia. I liked it from chapter 1: Zigzag is definately something-- she has an attitude, she's very straight-forward and she could kick your butt-- and she really balacnes Wilt's sweetness. I think they'd make a fantastic couple and am EAGERLY (VERY eagerly!) waiting for new chapters (this will come as no surprise to Vampyre, since I've practically begged for updates through fanfiction.net!). (When I got an email saying chapter 20 was up I almost fell out of my chair!) I really like this one, and will be following it until the finish!

P.S. Pleeeeeeeease update soon! I'm dying out in Bush Alaska!

Thank you so much, guys. I'm glad I've got something pretty good going here, even if it is... Very slow, both update wise and plot wise. But, hey, y'am should all be 'appy, I was originally planning on making their feelings come out at the very end. LOL, what a horrifically boring and annoying exprerience THAT would have been. Anyways, believe it or not, I'm actually updating EARLY this time. I are unpredictable, =3

Chapter 21: Delusion

Aww, don't you guys just love how much of an arse I am? :bloogrin:

I knew this would happen.

Yer not an arse, you just enjoy toying with Wilt's emotions. Now he'll NEVER leave his bedroom when she does leave...XD

You can cheat at this, Antgirl, since you already know the basic plot from the original XD Darn you *shakes fist*

I really do not understand why I get so much enjoyment out of making Wilt miserable. I mean, I love him to pieces, so why do I insist on making his life a misery?...

Hopefully it means that in the end, he will be generously rewarded for his persistence and for having survived all that you're putting him through!

pitbulllady

Uh... yeah sure, let's go with that...

I read ch. 21 this morning-- when I got the email saying it was up I almost burst! XD XD XD

Amen to that!

Oh, no... Is more bad stuff gonna happen?! :wiltshock: AAAH!

UPDATE SOON! I can't stand the suspense!

EVERYONE loves how much of an arse you are! LOL!8D

Honestly, though, the dialouge for Meredith was spot on. SPOT. ON. Perfect for a 5 year old girl.

As for Wilt getting his feelings hurt, well, that's just par for the course in romance, isn't it?

I, too, am enjoying what an arse you are-- it makes for good writing, and reading for us!

I think Ub3rD4n is right-- a little hurting is par in romance. I felt like my heart got squished a little romantically speaking this morning, in fact.

It took me forever, but I finally dropped you a review.

Thanks so much, WiltsAKGirl and Ub3rd4n, your comments are, like, ultra appreciated. Seriously.

Also, I got your review WiltsAKGirl, and I've left one for you on your story too :D

I hate to double post again, really I do, but, believe it or not guys, I actually have ANOTHER chapter! You know why?! 'Cos I haven't done any of my homework yet!

Chapter 22: Instincts

Enjoy!

Kidnapping? Grand theft auto? Going half a country away from Fosters? Sounds like something Bloo would do. Wilt MUST be crazy about her. Or just plain crazy.

BTW, Coco cola?;)

Yes, Coco Cola, 'cos I'm cool XD.

We know that Wilt can makes some pretty insane decisions. I mean, risking his life in Good Wilt Hunting to try and win back the approval of his creator. I'd imagine Wilt would do anything to hold something important to him in place, even if that means doing a runner.

Wow. Wilt is nuts. XDD

I left you a review over on FF.net, but this one took me totally by surprise! Still, like you said, Wilt has already proven that he's willing to do anything for a cause he really believes in, even die for it if need be, so I really shouldn't be too surprised! Like I said in my review, if the unique ambience and atmosphere of the South Carolina Low Country doesn't really fan that simmering romance into a raging inferno, there's no hope for it whatsoever! Still, I'd sure hate to have to ride all the way across the North American continent in a SCHOOL BUS...Oi, talk about butt fatigue! I guess having a certain tall red gentlemen along for the ride would make things a bit easier, though, and I'm sure from HIS perspective, that old bus beats a freakin' LAWNMOWER any day of the week, lol!
And he didn't exactly STEAL the bus, now did he, since Frankie(whom I suspect was in on that plot from the start, if not the one who came up with it)actually did hand him the key!

pitbulllady

So, I guess that means that Frankie stole it, cause it ain't her bus either!8D
:frankiemad:
Don't kill me, Frankie fans, I didn't mean to insult the precious....

We don't know that for sure; Frankie certainly must be the one who carries insurance on the bus, so it's not inconceivable that she is listed as one of the owners. Usually, in most US states, the person who usually operates a motor vehicle, unless they're a minor, is the one who has to carry insurance on it, and therefore is the one whose name will appear on the vehicle registration. Even if it belongs to Foster's Home(and it probably was donated to such), Frankie, being an employee/family member, would be considered an owner. Frankie is certainly the one who'd most miss the bus, since she depends on it for HER transportation, in any case. Besides, I don't think that Madame Foster would mind too much if Wilt decided to take his sweetie on a cross-country drive. I just can't bear the thought of having to make what would be about a four-day trip by CAR(which is probably a whole lot faster and more dependable), let alone a bus-I can barely stand a trip to Charleston in a bus from where I work, which is only two hours away, but then, at least Wilt and Zig-Zag don't have to put up with a busload of screaming fifth graders, either.

pitbulllady

I almost changed my mind about Wilt kidnapping Zigzag and taking the bus; I was going to have him charge down the road, dragging Zigzag along with him, then having Zigzag pull him to a stop when they're like, running through the park or something, followed by another argument and then Zigzag eventually trying to slap some snese into him. But I felt it was just... Too depressing, and I felt that something good should happen before everything goes wrong (Oh come on, you guys didnt think it would bee plain sailing from when Ziz dumped Ramone, did ya?)

I got your review, PBL, (I had my head phones in at the time, so the gun shot that sounds when I get an email defeaned me, thank you) and you'll probably be getting a note from me on DA or a PM on here rather soon, since I'd probably have a better chance penetrating re-enforced concrete with a plastic spoon than writing out everyday life it a state which is almost half way across the world to me. I really appreciate your offer to help me, since from here on, I officially have no idea what I'm doing XD

No problem-I'm happy to help. I make several trips to Charleston, aka "The Holy City", each year; I've got relatives and friends who live there, too. I got lost there recently, in the very same part of town that we glimpse in GWH, which is NOT a part of town you'll find on any of the tourist websites, let me tell you! The only good directions I got all day(I was looking for a convention center in the suburb of Mount Pleasant, where the Southeastern Studebaker Drivers Club was hosting a meeting and show) was from a member of the Crips, identified by his and his cronies' "colors", in front of a Voodoo shop off Rutledge Street. I don't know what was more interesting, the Voodoo shop, or the look on those guys' faces when a middle-aged White woman walked up to them and asked for directions, lol, even though they were doing their best to look menacing and threatening. This is one of those very old cities where you can be in a well-preserved historical section of town one minute, with art shops and five-star restaurants, where the upper crust of society still speaks with a slight British accent, and the next moment, you're in a crumbling, crime-and-drug-ridden ghetto, or just a bridge's span away, a tropical island, where the locals speak a language and dialect that's been almost unchanged since their ancestors were taken from their West African homes, centuries before.
You know it's gotta live up to that lable of "Most Polite City in America" when even the gang members are willing to give you directions!

pitbulllady

It only took me flippin' forever, but I finally dropped you a reveiw last night, Vampyre.

WARNING: SPOILERS

I loved this chapter. I was expecting something very sad, but then Wilt hauls off and kidnaps Zigzag. Dear God, I love it! It just goes to show that Wilt is willing to go to the ends of the EARTH for her, and what an amazing couple they'd make.

I noticed that Wilt's mind keeps going into the gutter more and more in these recent chapters. Read the following sentence very carefully: I'm not complaining! It's funny to have him think a relatively dirty thought and then go, ":wiltshock:" X)

I love having them go to Charleston! It's fantastic and I'm hoping for something romantic to happen.

END OF SPOILERS

Looking forward to your next update! (And it had better be soon, otherwise I won't write my sequel!)

LOL, Wilt is just the sort of guy who'd have lustful thoughts and be embarrassed about it! But, if Charleston doesn't bring out "something romantic" in those two, NOTHING will! Some of the tourist publications have referred to that city as "New Orleans Lite", since it's got a lot of that same ambience, just with a slightly more conservative twist.

Still, I'm for giving Vampyre plenty of time to get these next chapters right. She's never been to South Carolina, let alone Charleston, so writing dialog that's accurate for a place she's never visited(though I'm sure that the invitation is wide open)has to be tricky, to say the least. I think it would be easier for someone from the US to write dialog in "Black Country" English, since that's pretty similar to how Ozzie Osbourne talks, and EVERYONE has heard him, but other than Wilt, Steven Colbert is the only native Charlestonian I know that most folks have at least heard of, and he has no accent whatsoever(acting lessons). It's not just dialog, either, but local sights, sounds and VERY importantly, TASTES. This is a "food" city, known for its cuisine, again, much like New Orleans.

pitbulllady

Ozzie Osbourne is what Black Country Folk would call a "Brummy", seeing as he originates from Birmingham, which is just outside the Black Country, so, yeah, you can see where he gets his accent. I'd imagine that it would be quite trying either way, since the Black Country is the only area of Britain that still uses terms from old English that you can probably find in Shakepsearian plays like "Macbeth" and "Romeo and Juliet", just slightly modified, even if it's not used as much as it used to be. The accent has grown to be a bit more intelligeble since the mid 19th century, back when the sky was still black and kids no older than five's faces were even blacker, covered in sut after working down in the coal mines...

I WILL try and update faster than usual, but, like PBL said, it is alot more difficult to write at the moment, since I haven't, and probably never will go to Charleston...

OK, fine-- I'm willing to wait. Besides, it evens out since it'll be a while before I get my sequel really up and running like a well-oiled machine. I just now started writing it!